Jehan's Torment

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Jehan's Torment

Postby Jehans Rose » Wed Sep 12, 2012 4:15 am

When the sun’s rays fell to the night
and the paths were cold and dark
The trees somber and gloomy
And forever lost seemed the light
I seemed to drowned in a endless sea

I could not believe that a dawn would come
For no stars shone my way
And no love existed to guide me home
And I was abandoned to decay
My eyes sought the meadows
And found only the remoteness sea
The darkness was endless and yet still I hoped
Hoped and prayed that you’d remember me

Such a cross I was made to bear
Where were you as my heart fell,
Mingled with my tears of despair,
And I was doomed to this hell?

We are all made to travel Cavalry
But those who prevail are few
I will persevere to be the best I can
and keep our freedom in view
but is there not one left to remember me?

Take these fears far from my heart
So that when the sun dawns bright
The glory of it's blessed rays
shall never show how I hid in fright
when the devil tore my soul apart.

This wilderness shall not conquer me
I have love and through love, courage
And together that should be enough
For I shall not serve in bondage
But will suffer death to be free

I’m confined to this lion’s lair
Where even death is not my foe
And I understand none of this-
This torment that I must endure
Without a memory to give me bliss
So from the realms of despair
And the tides of woe
I beg of thee,
To only please, remember me
As I’ve remembered you
And only then shall I be free.
"They heard a manly voice cry out: 'Vive la France! Long Live the Future!'
There was a flash and an explosion."

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Re: Jehan's Torment

Postby YoungStudentMarius » Wed Sep 12, 2012 4:43 am

Wow. That is amazing. I could not write like that. It's...beautiful. Poetic. Powerful. Picturesque. And very, very Jehan Prouvaire. Nice job. I greatly enjoyed that. Who is he addressing in the poem? It's almost heartbreaking, yet uplifting in a sense, as well. Thank you for sharing.
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Re: Jehan's Torment

Postby Mlle_Alexandrie » Wed Sep 12, 2012 1:13 pm

Oh my Supreme Being. That was gorgeous. I believe you've just out-Jehaned Jehan!
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Re: Jehan's Torment

Postby AriadneIS » Wed Sep 12, 2012 9:32 pm

Oh... that's... beautiful. I can't believe it. That's amazing.

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Re: Jehan's Torment

Postby Jehans Rose » Thu Sep 13, 2012 4:15 am

Thank you all for your lovely reviews-this was my first shot at a sort of fan-poem. As for whom he's addressing, even I can't you that. Perhaps it's to God, a lover, or even all humanity. I guess it's up to however one interpret's it. Thanks again! :)
"They heard a manly voice cry out: 'Vive la France! Long Live the Future!'
There was a flash and an explosion."

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Re: Jehan's Torment

Postby geminimimi » Thu Sep 13, 2012 11:55 am

It struck me as very Jehan-ish after reading it. Like, I can totally imagine Jehan pouring out all his emotions and passionately writing out all this. The language is absolutely sublime and very poetic. Like I said, Jehan-ish. I somehow imagine this to take place moments after this death. Jehan could think up something as beautiful as this in moments, he could. I wish I could write like that. :)
I like to think everything whizzes by her head like sheep jumping over fences, and that Marius comes by every 3-4 sheep. And add scattered leaves flying around and rain falling too. And maybe a unicorn. Thus the insides of Éponine's mind.

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Re: Jehan's Torment

Postby Courgette » Fri Feb 15, 2013 6:42 pm

Oh Jehan...you are my new favourite person now *internet hug*

So beautiful, which is why I adore Jehan soooo very much.
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